My First Intro - Is it ok?

Hey Guys This is My First intro I hope You Guys Will Like it
There is Some kind of Problem With a Backgound But Still
Wanna make Your Own intro ?
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This is where i learned
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KLJRgBIpwd8
thanks To ThatSwedeHD
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Programs
1.after effects
2.cinema 4d
3 sony vegas (optional)
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